Initial Example: Some students' papers are filled with simple sentences. Simple sentences are sentences that contain only one independent clause. Simple sentences are fine for the drafting process. Strings of simple sentences create a "choppy" feel to the writing. Revising simple sentences requires combining sentences. Combining sentences simplifies the reader's task of understanding the connections between ideas.

Revised: Some students' papers are filled with simple sentences, i.e. sentences that contain only one independent clause, and while such sentences are fine as the output of the drafting process, strings of simple sentences create a "choppy" feel to the writing and require the reader to figure out the connections between ideas, problems that can be addressed by combining strings of simple, one-claim statements into more complex sentences.