TARGETS FOR REVISING
Rationale
Easy to Spot
Harder to Spot
Simple Sentence Syndrome
1. Some students' papers are filled with simple sentences.  Simple sentences are sentences that contain not much more than one independent clause.
1.' Some students' papers are filled with sentences that contain not much more than one independent clause.

2. Simple sentences are fine for the drafting process.  Strings of simple sentences create a "choppy" feel to the writing.
2.' Simple sentences are fine for the drafting process, but strings of simple sentences create a "choppy" feel to the writing.

3. Revising simple sentences requires combining sentences.  Combining sentences simplifies the reader's task of understanding the connections between ideas.
3.' By combining simple sentences, a writer can avoid such choppiness and can also simplify the reader's task of understanding the connections between ideas.